Once upon a time 2017 there was two volcanos. One was a woman and one was a man.Their names are called Joe and Zoe.
Joe and Zoe love each other.They stay together forever. But one day on May the 16th
Joe erupted and started to move away from Zoe. Zoe said “what's happening” the explosion was over.
So now Joe and Zoe are separated.But then another day Zoe erupt then she started to move away more than Joe. Zoe’s eruption is finished.
Zoe and Joe is so sad. “Something needs to bring
us back together” said Joe. Joe said “I got and idea when one of us erupt turn your head and then your ash,smoke and lava will blow you back to me. Zoe said “that's a great idea”.
So after Joe and Zoe is going to erupt. They both turn their heads and they have been blown back to each other. Then they lived happily ever after the End.
Nice job Charles! I really like that you decided to use dialogue in your story to make it more interesting! Take some time to read your story out loud exactly as it is written. There are some words you have in there that could use a different ending.
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